My favourite hero 英语作文，帮我批改一下
My favourite hero is Jian ming- wang.He has a round face and dark hair .He is the horner of taiwan. when he was a boy,he was very interested in baseball.so he is very enjoy as a pitcher on school team .his parents didn't agreen with him to be a player,but he didn't want to give up. So he kept practing his pitching and gradually got better. now he is a strating pitcher fot U.S mojor league baseball team new york .he had become a sports hero througnout the rest of the worle.he is my favourite hero! He is a sport hero! he is not a star!!!I like him very much,do you like him too?最好先点题my favourite hero
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With the development of technology, Internet shopping becomes more and more popular.
The reason why Internet is popular with isthat with technology developing.---the reason why Internet is so popular is because the technology has developed a lot.
Especially online shopping so fashion nowadays.---Online shopping has become especially fashionable nowadays
Because online shopping have some new functions.--- has some new features.
Here are some advantages.---here are some advantages of online shopping.
To begin with, itcan bring us more convenience ,we need not go to the mall to buy some things,such as clothes and shoes---First of all, it makes our life much more convenient as we don't need to go to the mall to shop anymore. We can just sit at home and make orders.
Next, It costs less money, so we select it. ---Second, it costs less money and that's why we use it.
What’sworse,,we might buy some fake goods. ---However, there are also some bad things about online shopping. For example, we might sometimes get fake goods.
So, some people prefer to go to the mall ratherthan online shopping ---So some people prefer to go shopping in the mall rather than on the internet.
Besides, some young people in favour of online shopping.---What's more, Some young people are addicted to online shopping and refuse to go out.
become addicted in --become addicted to
it will influence your life.---it will have bad influence on your life.
As longas online shopping properly, it makes life better.---As long as people can manage online shopping properly, it will make our lives much better.
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